some more fixing in the a1211 article

1 files changed, 21 insertions, 21 deletions

diff --git a/content/blog/archlinux-macbook-a1211.md b/content/blog/archlinux-macbook-a1211.md
index 7da40cf..4020dbb 100644
--- a/content/blog/archlinux-macbook-a1211.md
+++ b/content/blog/archlinux-macbook-a1211.md
@@ -39,7 +39,7 @@ This can be done in the *Disk Utility.app*, just leave EFI in peace, set OSX to
 64 GB and assign the rest of the hard disk as free space.
 
 Prepare the USB stick for installation, I had no luck with the standard ISO,
-but a crawfted USB-stick worked:
+but a hand-crafted USB-stick worked:
 
 ```
 hdiutil convert -format UDRW -o archlinux-2018.09.01-x86_64.img archlinux-2018.09.01-x86_64.iso 
@@ -59,7 +59,7 @@ causing trouble all along. I didn't take ReFind as I didn't expect the
 failing to build with more modern 32-bit binutils and gcc.
 
 I installed a 32-bit GRUB onto the EFI partition as a second boot option
-along to OSX. This one then boots ArchLinux. This is easier than to try
+along to OSX. This one then boots ArchLinux. This is easier than trying
 to load a 64-bit kernel with kernel EFI stub support from an 32-bit
 EFI environemnt with systemd-boot.
 
@@ -84,24 +84,24 @@ All I got was the following kernel and Xorg error messages:
 [31.041] (EE) open /dev/dri/card0: No such file or directory
 ```
 
-So this basically translates into: "I don't have a direct rendering interface,
+So this basically translates to: "I don't have a direct rendering interface,
 because there is no video card, because there is no BIOS for that card".
 
-The idea was to extract the VESA BIOS on a distribution which handles
+The key idea was to extract the VESA BIOS on a distribution which handles
 the KMS switching correctly (in my case an old Ubuntu 10).
 
 ```
 dd if=/dev/mem of=vbios.bin bs=65536 skip=12 count=1
 ```
 
-Verify that indeed you got the right firmware. There is an error message
+Verify that you actually got the right firmware. There is an error message
 when booting the kernel saying:
 
 ```
 [2.052742] radeon 0000:01:00.0: Invalid PCI ROM header signature: expecting 0xaa55, got 0xa1a1
 ```
 
-so we expect to find that signature in the *vbios.bin* file:
+so we expect to find that signature at the beginning of the *vbios.bin* file:
 
 ```
 hexdump -C vbios.bin | head -n 1
@@ -120,8 +120,8 @@ options fail.
 My version of the module is [here](/text/blog/archlinux-macbook-a1211/radeon_bios.c), check
 out function *radeon_read_bios_from_firmware* and the code calling that function.
 
-Now, Archlinux needs the Radeon driver for KMS as early as possible, so
-I thought it's a nice idea to put it into the init-RAM-disk:
+In order to use the Radeon driver for KMS as early as possible,
+I put it into the init-RAM-disk:
 
 So, I added to */etc/mkinitcpio.conf* and rebuilt the ram disks:
 
@@ -178,7 +178,7 @@ You will also need https://aur.archlinux.org/packages/isight-firmware-tools/.
 It contains tools to extract the file containg the firmware called *isight.fw*
 from *AppleUSBVideoSupport*.
 
-Finally it contains an udev rule in */etc/udev/rules.d/isight.rules* then makes
+Finally it contains an udev rule in */etc/udev/rules.d/isight.rules* which then makes
 sure the firmware is also loaded on startup during detection of the camera via udev.
 
 ### Wifi
@@ -208,7 +208,7 @@ to use systemd-networkd with that?
 ### Fans and sensors
 
 [https://aur.archlinux.org/packages/macfanctld/](macfanctl) from the AUR works nicely,
-also lm_sensors had no problems to get its data.
+also lm_sensors had no problems to get the sensor data.
 
 ### Power consumption
 
@@ -227,15 +227,15 @@ be happy by just switching off the mousepad completly.
 The one button mouse is a disaster for people being used to Xorg copy-
 paste or Oberon enthusiasts used to three mouse buttons.
 
-Two finger scrolling is nice, but per default only for up and down.
-I enabled it also to left and right. Besides, the keyboard is missing
+Scrolling with two fingers is nice, but per default they are enabled only for up and down.
+I enabled also scrolling to the left and right. Besides, the keyboard is missing
 PageUp, PageDown keys, which is a usability nightmare when you want to
 scroll bigger source code files or web pages (yes, I know there is Fn-Page,
 but having Ctrl, Alt, Meta and Fn all on the same spot doesn't make it
 easier to find the right one).
 
-Side note: *Fn* is for page up, *Ctrl* for Wordstar short-cuts, "Alt" for
-Notion shortcuts, and they are really _CLOSE_ together..
+Side note: I'm using *Fn* for keyboard scrolling (PgUp, PgDown), *Ctrl* for Wordstar short-cuts, "Alt" for
+Notion (window manager) shortcuts, and they are really _CLOSE_ together..
 
 Change */etc/X11/xorg.conf.d/50-synaptics.conf* as follows to your likings:
 ```
@@ -270,11 +270,11 @@ I might add some Ctrl, Meta modifiers to get 2, 3 mouse button clicks later.
 
 ## Philosophical Outro
 
-In a world where companies try hard to get people into their ecosystem (what they
-can do with the products they bought and own, what they can repair or let repair, what kind
+In a world where companies try hard to get people into their ecosystem (controlling what they
+what users can do with the products they bought and own, what they can repair or let repair, what kind
 of operating system and software they are supposed to use), I think, it's the
-duty of any tech professional to invest some time to give old hardware some
-usage back (hence I'm also working on the Archlinux32 project). Also throwing
+duty of any tech professional to invest some time to give old hardware back some
+purpose (hence I'm also working on the Archlinux32 project). Also, throwing
 away barely used machines, just because a company wants to earn billions, is an
 ecological disaster. Remember, companies have been invented to make money, don't
 get fooled by "we are there to make the world a better place" or any other marketing bs.
@@ -286,9 +286,9 @@ around and I'm not buying new machines since 10 years (I do buy old ones from Eb
 
 * https://everymac.com/systems/apple/macbook_pro/specs/macbook-pro-core-2-duo-2.33-15-specs.html :
   specifications of the A1211 model
-* https://bugs.freedesktop.org/show_bug.cgi?id=26891: the patch to radeon.ko,
-  enabling loading of file as VESA bios.
-* https://bbs.archlinux.org/viewtopic.php?id=139511: some discussions about
+* [https://bugs.freedesktop.org/show_bug.cgi?id=26891](https://bugs.freedesktop.org/show_bug.cgi?id=26891): the patch to radeon.ko,
+  enabling loading of file as VESA bios
+* [https://bbs.archlinux.org/viewtopic.php?id=139511](https://bbs.archlinux.org/viewtopic.php?id=139511): some discussions about
   the VESA radeon topic in the Archlinux forum.
 * https://wiki.archlinux.org/index.php/Mac#Webcam: how to make the camera work